WritingFind the words worth keeping.
Try another opening, follow a different thought, or sharpen a passage. The Writing concept keeps your current draft in view as you consider alternatives.
Private explorationTry a different opening.
The draft starts with an empty street. The alternatives shift attention to a bus stop, a map, or a walk home. Compare what each opening asks the reader to notice before choosing a revision.
Current draftOpening for “The Public Shade”
By noon, the unshaded blocks had emptied. The city’s heat plan began there: with the routes people could no longer walk.
Alternatives · 4Proposed 02
- Start with the bus stop, where the shade ends at eleven.
- At noon, the map becomes a record of who can still move.
- The hottest blocks are also the longest walks home.
- Shade arrives unevenly, long before relief does.
Proposed insertion
At noon, the map becomes a record of who can still move.
Keep the draft in your hands.
- Compare in context
- Read a proposed passage beside the manuscript it would join. Consider its rhythm, emphasis, and fit.
- Accept deliberately
- A proposed change stays separate from the current draft until you choose to bring it in.
- Keep sources close
- The product direction keeps source material distinct from your prose, so you can consider both as you revise.